Saga Of First Love__ Blue Tick
The response to the last post has been great. Though it comes out of the personal requests to read the posts but still it gives that feel good factor whch one desires for! So let’s start from where I left but something before that which might come to the mind of readers and peculiarly those who know who writes on ths blog.. DISCLAIMER : THE STORY BEARS NO RESEMBLANCE TO ANY PERSON IN REAL LIFE. IT’S A WORK OF FICTION AND SHALL CONTINUE TO REMAIN SO. IT HAS NO INTENTIONS TO HURT ANY ONE’S FEELINGS AND SHALL NEVER INTEND TO DO SO! The story continues: DARMIYAAN JO TERE-MERE HAI SAMAJH KE HOSH KE PARE HAI HUM TO EK ANJAAN NACHEEZ HAIN DEEVANA KAHO YAA PARVAANA JAANKAR BHI HUMNE YEH NAA JAANA KAASH US DIN LAFZ ZUBAAN PE UTAR AAYE HOTE VAKT KA TAKAAZA HUME MAALOOM NAA PADHA MOHTARMA TO HUMAARI AAHAT SE BHI BEKHABAR THIN KAASH KHABAR DE DI HOTI EK BAAR HI SAHI BATA DIYA HOTA KAASH KEH DIYA HOTA AFSOS MAGAR AAJ HOTA HAI JAB ZAMAANE KI BANDI...
Hi, nice work. But it needs considerable amount of work in structuring the content and making it more readable. Some of the pages seem to be straight from a wedding card. If you are going with a particular theme stick to it. If you are going informal , go all out, make sure the reader doesn't have second thoughts about reading while trying to figure out what is the "feel" of the magazine. The editing also needs to be less linient as the articles were way to long while others seemed a bit too short. The key is consistency. Cheers!!
ReplyDeleteHey.. Thanks for reviewing this! A genuine one-I will try to work on the shortcomings ! Next edition would surely make you feel the vibe I wanna give my readers :))
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